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MORNING COMMUTE


I read poems on the train into work again. As I've mentioned before, it's a great start to the work week. I'd like to share a couple of gems with you.

HOW DOTH THE LITTLE CROCODILE
By Lewis Carroll

How doth the little crocodile
Improve his shining tail;
And pour the waters of the Nile
On every golden scale!

How cheerfully he seems to grin,
How neatly spreads his claws,
And welcomes little fishes in,
With gently smiling jaws!


DISGUSTING
By Anonymous

At the boarding house where I live
Things are getting very old.
Long gray hairs in the butter,
And the cheese is green with mold,
When the dog died we had sausage,
When the cat died, catnip tea.
When the landlord died I left it;
Spareribs are too much for me.


I read a few more and then was inspired to write my own. And with less than 10 minutes to my station, this is what I came up with:

Monday Morning Train
By Angela De Groot

Hoodies and hats
Newspapers snap
Lindenwold to Philadelphia.

I think it needs another stanza or two. Although I like them short and sweet.



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writerjenn
Feb. 3rd, 2009 01:54 am (UTC)
You can't go wrong with Lewis Carroll.

The commuter train is rife with images. The salt on the floor ... the person who takes up three seats as if it's not rush hour ... the cell-phone zombies ... the guy listening to earphones so loud that everyone else can hear the music ... the woman sleeping with her head against the window ... the Very Important Announcement over the loudspeaker that sounds like, "Mff mmf brb mbrm." Ah, good times.
angeladegroot
Feb. 3rd, 2009 03:05 am (UTC)
I like your cell-phone zombies and the important announcement made me laugh. I do like commuting by train.
cedunkley
Feb. 3rd, 2009 02:10 am (UTC)
I like some poetry but don't really have that kind of writing skill. I have written a couple though. Here's one I wrote a very long time ago:

I turned my head up to the sky
and saw the face within the sea.
Said the Man as he passed by
"This is sheer lunacy!"


I added another verse or two many years after jotting down the above, but I don't have those memorized. They're written down in one of my notebooks.
angeladegroot
Feb. 3rd, 2009 03:06 am (UTC)
I like it - it made me smile. The sign of a good poem in my book.
kellyrfineman
Feb. 3rd, 2009 03:26 am (UTC)
I posted that first one just last week. Now the second one, I've not heard before. Anonymous is pretty darn macabre - it's like a Sweeney Todd poem.

Your verse is good - but it does sound like it needs another one (you've got the setup, now we all want the payoff!)
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